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posted by [personal profile] elanya at 05:05pm on 23/03/2013 under ,
I finished writing the conclusion to my dissertation today, and have outlined my introduction. I'm sort of flailing about how to start, but right now, my opening lines is: "The ocean is awesome."

Maybe if I can keep going, I can even finish this off this weekend? Then I just need to make sure all my references are in place, and put my figures in to chapter 5. Then I need a table of contents, at least, and I'll be happy to send the bulk of it to Kevin and start getting my appendices in shape.

ETA: So, here is my opening paragraph, then! (*tweak tweak*)

The ocean is awesome. It is difficult to imagine living close to it, relying on it for food, communication, work, and travel, without it impacting one's understanding of the world and one's own place in it. Individuals who are part of maritime communities share the experience of this influential presence in their lives. The ocean provides a basis for contextualizing not only their identities as individuals but as members of a coherent group. The identification of a community with the maritime environment is maritimity, and this identification is evident in the archaeological record.
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posted by [personal profile] bessemerprocess at 10:51pm on 23/03/2013
The sounds very, very exciting! Go you, go!
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posted by [personal profile] elanya at 10:53pm on 23/03/2013
*flails*

Thanks :3 And now I just added my actual first paragraph so you should tell me if is good :3
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posted by [personal profile] bessemerprocess at 10:59pm on 23/03/2013
I think the but in the second sentence sounds sort of weird, the repetition of awesome in sentence one and sentence three seems a bit off and while I've never heard it before I love the word maritimity. Otherwise, I'm really interested in what you are about it say, and I totally agree with you: the ocean is awesome.
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posted by [personal profile] elanya at 11:01pm on 23/03/2013
Ack,the but is an editing artifact from a previous sentence structure. the second awesome was supposed to be a direct reference to the first, but apparently it is not working so I will think of something else. And otherwise, yay, thanks :D

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